Holiday Report

This term we are working on writing amazing News Reports.  To warm ourselves up we wrote reports on a holiday experince, but written in the 3rd person.  Here are a couple of examples.  How do you think we did?  What did we do well and what could we do to improve?  We would love your feedback!

A Stinging Surprise

by Julia

10 year old Julia Huinink from Pahoia Primary School was stung buy a blue bottle while playing touch with family and friends.

“It was an overcast day and it was raining. As I ran through the rain the wind caused it to charge towards us and when the rain hit it stung like a swarm of bees.” explained Julia

The Huinink’s had been going to Waikawau bay for about six years and had never seen blue bottles there before. As the teams started to score tries Julia moved over to were all the seaweed had been washed up onto the beach. But what Julia didn’t know was that there were two jelly fish hiding in a clump of it. Julia suddenly felt a painful sting that made her jump out of her skin. As she landed on the sloppy wet sand she felt the sting again. Julia looked down and saw a blue and white tentacle wrapped around two of her toes.

Julia Huinink kept on playing but it got itchy as her feet started to dig into the sand. Lost more tries where scored and it was down to the last try wins.